Secondary 3s, 4s or 5s?? Who wins? Who do you support??
ON 3rd August 2010,
Our beloved EAST SPRING SECONDARY school organized the inter-class games between the secondary 3s, 4s and 5s students. Each class is divided in three different games, soccer (for boys), basketball (for both girls and boys) and lastly the captain's ball (for girls).
Being able to be at the event, it was really a great pleasure as I am able to witness how the other classes play in the game and how great their moves were while playing. The other teams also showed great sportsmanship by helping the opponent up when they fell and asked if they were fine. The team members also shook the opponents hand at the end of every game despite the results. The supporters cheered for the teams and did not jeer.
I was very fortunate to be able to take part in the game, and have hands-on experience myself. Even though it was tiring after the game but we enjoyed the game as it was a fun and memorable activity and it was a really good time to get our class more bonded and learn the importance of teamwork.
Photographer of the event, Cheng Wai Ling, exclaimed," the event was really intense! I'm really excited to see all the different classes competing against each other."
Nice way of opening up the article. I like(: And giving informative information such as describing what sport is for which gender. Plus, it was a short and simple article. And I like the way you paragraph the article.
ReplyDeleteI like how you start the article.I agree with fattah.It is a short article that consist of alot of article.
ReplyDeleteGerry,
ReplyDeletePersonal and reflective account of the games. However this sounds more like a personal reflection than a newspaper article! An article has to have as few 'I's as possible (or none at all!). It has to be objective, factual, serious.
"Being able to be at the event, it was really a great pleasure as I am able to witness how the other classes play in the game and how great their moves were while playing." --> this can be rewritten into:
"The classes gave their utmost at the game, demonstrating some of the best moves ever seen. The team members interacted well with one another and..."
(you get the point)
Try re-writing this!
- Miss J. Tan